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Post by kaleb on Nov 4, 2010 14:00:57 GMT -7
"Next time, leave me out of it"
The Basics
Name: Damian McPhail Nicknames/Aliases: Ian (Given to him by his brother) Age: 17 Grade: Junior Occupation: Student Sexuality: Heterosexual Monster Parent: Drakon (Ice Dragon) Mortal Relatives: Mother- Katlyn Anee McPhail (Deceased) Brother- Kaleb McPhail
Physical Statistics
Height: 5 ft 11 ½ in Weight: 165 Hair Color: Light Brown Eye Color: Deep Blue
Lets Get More Personal
Likes: 1. Eating, ALOT 2. Hanging out with Kaleb 3. Reading 4. Cold Climates 5. Playing Guitar Dislikes: 1. Hot Weather 2. Monsters 3. Meeting Strangers 4. Having to do things he doesn’t like 5. Fighting Personality: Damian’s main personality traits are scared, shy, and nervous. He is not one to try new things or meet new people. He likes to have his own way done. He also likes to have a well planned schedule to help him get through the day. In contrast with Kaleb, Damian adopts a diplomatic approach in handling relations and he is more empathetic towards people around him. Rather than fighting or looking for a fight, Damian prefers to use pacifistic ways and avoid any form of violence.
Damian doesn’t hold the same hatred toward the gods as Kaleb does but rather respects them as the higher beings in the world. Damian also has no ill feelings toward his father but rather is thankful for the life that was given to him. He hates all form of heat and prefers cold areas that help me concentrate. Damian also has a deep strange fondness of night. He seems to be more exciting and full of energy during the night. History: Damian McPhail was born a year after his older brother Kaleb. From the moment he was born he was sheltered from anything harmful. His mother and brother did everything in their power to keep him away from harm. This was of course hard for everyone with Kaleb getting into trouble. Damian’s first use of his power was at the age of seven. Kaleb was setting a fire to a pile of leaves when he was suddenly caught on fire himself. Damian ran forward to help his brother and put the fire out merely by touching it. Afterward Kaleb’s arm was covered in ice.
All returned to normal soon as the boys continued with school and their mother continued with work. However one day, as the boys returned from school, they were attacked by a monster. Kaleb and Damian both fully used their powers at that moment. Damian, however fell into a coma at this time. While in his coma he received a vision from his father, an Ice Dragon by the name of Drakon.
In this vision the Ice Dragon claimed his son by forming a tribal tattoo of a dragon across Damian’s back, this tattoo glows whenever Damian uses his powers. At first Damian didn’t quite understand his abilities until his mother explained to him and Kaleb that he was the son of an Ice Dragon. She revealed that it was thanks to Drakon that she learned so much about Kaleb's father. Drakon had watched her for months after before and after Kaleb's birth. She and him became close friends and he even defended her from harm a number of times. Drakon revealed to her that Hyperion had slayed his family and that he was going to kill her out of spite, however he now found himself unable to. He revealed that he had two forms, one that resembled a half-man and half dragon, and his "true" form. He used the mist so that his smaller form appeared as a mortal. In time their mother and this dragon fell in love. They had Damian out of love and all was well for a long time. Until Hyperion showed up again. He used his power to destroy Drakon, returning him to Tartarus, and left their mother alone and heartbroken. This revelation drove a huge spike between Kaleb and Damian. After this Kaleb ran away from home. This left Damian in a heartbroken state, as Kaleb was the only one that truly understood Damian. One night while Kaleb was gone, several monsters caught the scent of Damian and his mother and attacked their home. The reason they had always caught the scent of Damian and Kaleb is due to them always being together, their auras acted as a combined force. Kaleb's aura scent still lingered around their home. This combined with the scent of Damian and his mother caught the attention of the Minotaur and a group of Hellhounds on the hunt for half-bloods.
All seemed lost until Damian managed to summon a massive spear, gifted to him by his father. This blade was formed out of Damian’s sweat and tears. He then used this blade to destroy three of the monsters. This however was too little too late as his mother was soon killed and their house was set ablaze due to the gas being ruptured, Damian barely survived due to his power over ice. With this Kaleb returned to him and promised never to leave Damian’s side. From then on the boys were on the run, moving from city to city avoiding and killing whatever monsters they came across.
This was their life for a long time until they finally found Camp Halfblood. This camp became Damian’s refuge until they were moved to the Half-Blood Academy. Now Damian is in a new environment and worse of all he is being separated from his brother.
Abilities: Damian exhibits heightened senses whenever he is in a cold environment. Secondly he has established his fathers ability to use the moisture in the air to form Ice. This ice can be used in several different ways. Weaknesses: Whenever in extremely hot areas, Damian exhibit’s a sick persona as if someone who is fatally ill. Without direct moisture in the air or some other form of liquid medium he cannot make ice. Other Information: A spear made of Celestial Bronze that can be summoned by any form of liquid. This blade freezes anything that it cuts. The amount of freezing depends on the deepness of the cut. The Spear’s name is Selene.
Sample post: Damian and Kaleb walked down the street of their hometown happily. They had just had a great day at school. Kaleb was bragging about how the hottest girl in his class was totally digging him. Damian slowly started to laugh as he had heard that the girl wanted nothing to do with him. As they walked Kaleb knocked Damian up side the head. Damian grabbed his head as he said “Ow Kaleb! Why did you hit me!”. Kaleb laughed as he said “I thought I saw a bug on you!”. Damian pouted as he said “You’re lying! You did that just caus eI wasn’t really listening!”. Kaleb just laughed and started to run away as he said “If you know why I hit you then why ask?!”. Damian sighed as he began to run after Kaleb yelling “Hey wait up! Don’t leave me here!”.
Kaleb laughed and continued to run until he noticed something in the distance behind Damian. Damian noticed Kaleb’s far off look and turned around to see something coming towards them. After close look the two noticed that is looked like a large demonic dog. Damian recalled his brother’s research and remembered the name of it to be a Hellhound. He turned back to Kaleb and began to run. Kaleb ran towards him all the while screaming “Damian! Run faster, run home!”. Suddenly Damian felt claws on his leg, and with that he went down. The hellhound stood over him, teeth bared and ready to fest upon him. Suddenly the entire area was covered in fire and the hellhound was shot away. Damian looked over to see that the fire was coming from Kaleb. One look at Kaleb’s face showed that he didn’t even know how he was truly doing it, but that didn’t stop the fire from bombarding the hellhound. Suddenly Damian felt an ancient power swelling within him, yearning to come out. Like a beast clawing at a cage the power grew more and more violent. Hesitantly, Damian allowed the power to take control and with that the cool air turned even colder and began to freeze over. The fire died down, as if on call and the crisped hellhound was suddenly covered in ice and frozen solid. Kaleb and Damian stood there proudly for a moment until everything went dark. The last thing Damian heard was the sound of his brother’s voice calling his name. Darkness. For what seemed an eternity there was nothing but darkness.
Finally there it was, a light in the darkness. Damian observed the bright blue light as he tried to finally reach it. As the light drew closer to him he noticed a shape in the light. As the shape grew larger it came out as large dragon. Normally Damian would be filled with a sense of dread and terror, but at that moment there was only a cool relaxing feeling. It felt like he was standing in the snow on a winter day. He felt at home. Suddenly the dragon leaned down and touched Damian’s back. The sensation felt as though a giant cool breeze was flowing against his back. Damian looked up at the creature as it slowly began to fade away. Damian smiled at him as the dragon faded. Suddenly he heard an ancient voice say “Its time to wake up Damian Dragon Son”. With that Damian opened his eyes. His mother and brother were standing over him and he was on a hospital bed. Damian looked into his mother’s eyes as he said “Who’s Drakon Momma?”. With that Damian’s mother fell silent and looked between her two sons as she said “There are a few things I need to tell you boys”.
That’s when everything went downhill. After that Kaleb ran away from home and Damian received his spear from his father. After that day his mother died and his brother and him started to run around the country. After that the two brothers encountered Camp Half-Blood, and then were sent to Half-Blood Academy.
Damian woke up then, silently yawning away the sleep. His brother always told him not to eat ice cream before bed, it always made him have bad dreams. Damian rose up, stiff with all his old memories. How many times had he had the same dream? How many times had he remembered all of the bad memories of his past. Damian stood there silently as he said “I wonder if there is any more Ice Cream”.
OOC Information
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Post by damian on Nov 4, 2010 14:45:50 GMT -7
K, I modified it!
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Post by Pontos on Nov 4, 2010 15:54:36 GMT -7
Doesn't look to bad at all, just need to remember to put how and when Damian's mother met the Drakon, preferably how he used the mist to even make it possible. We also need to know how his mother knew/discovered that that father was in fact a drakon. The other thing is that half-monster auras are the weakest of the 3 groups, with children of the Olympian big 3 being the strongest in drawing in monsters.
How and what monsters found him and caused the fire that killed his mother, just so we have a point of reference. Then the last thing I saw was the sample post, it was really pretty good, but there was a point where there were a lot of "suddenly"s in a short space of time. Try to mix it up a bit, it won't stop you from being accepted as is, but it will help develop your writing some. After all, that's one of the reasons we're here, to role play, have fun and become better writers.
Hope this helps, and questions PM me.
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Post by kaleb on Nov 6, 2010 10:54:15 GMT -7
kk, I modified what you told me to!!
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Post by Pontos on Nov 6, 2010 15:21:32 GMT -7
Welcome to Half-Blood Academy! Don't forget to sign in at the Who's Who Thread, and make sure you get your Face ClaimOnce again, Welcome and happy Role Playing!
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